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..:tattoos from you:.. by ~Angel-Soul:iconAngel-Soul:

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I’m thinking again
You on my mind means
I’ll be sad tomorrow
[yeah I’ll be sad tomorrow]
Tattoos on my heart
Laser treatment wont even;
     work this time
[no it wont work
this time around]
I know you didn’t mean to
    scratch the needle in so deep
but you did
and at first I was happy
with my new tattoo
[I was happy.
happy about you]
but now it’s just
another thing you
left
behind
and you on my mind again
means the poison will return
to penetrate me;
through and through
and through.
I’m calling for my
my anti virus
but I don’t think that it can hear me
I don’t think
   it knows my name
©2005-2009 ~Angel-Soul
:iconangel-soul:

Author's Comments

Sometimes I wish I could write something that rhymes like I used to . I'm not sure what to think of this . I guess we all have something left on our heart from someone :heart:

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:iconwdsjac:
~wdsjac Jul 20, 2005, 1:57:41 PM
yea hey, those damn people you get involved with too deeply...

well put.

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:iconattalus:
~Attalus Jul 20, 2005, 3:03:16 PM
I like these lines:

"and at first I was happy
with my new tattoo
[I was happy.
happy about you]"
Well-rhymed and scanned. :thumbsup:

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Vita brevis, ars longa, mors profunda.
:iconblessingunaccounted4:
~BlessingUnaccounted4 Jul 20, 2005, 6:00:28 PM
ive never had anyone like that yet, well i am only 14 so one day i'll meet someone like that i suppose. anyways, very good poem. i have yet to read a poem from you that is disappointing or just plain ok. lolz And atleast you can write open poems, rhyming poems (to me) gets old fast but open poems are something formed by each poet, which makes it even more special. but then again all of mine rhyme....

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So that is how I learned the lesson that everyones alone.
And your eyes must do some raining if you are ever gonna grow.
But when crying don't help and you can't compose yourself.
It is best to compose a poem, an honest verse of longing or simple song
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~click-baker Jul 21, 2005, 1:41:26 AM
'I know you didn’t mean to
scratch the needle in so deep'
You could have also made reference to the pain of getting a tattoo, and that of losing someone.

I suppose those that loved someone but no longer do, always leave a mark of some sort.
Not that I would know, which makes me sad.

I also like that heart in the preview. Phunky!
I wanto make my own design when I get a tattoo. :D

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*Insert something meaningful here*
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~Angel-Soul Jul 21, 2005, 6:49:21 AM
Well I think the fact that the needle 'scratched' implies that it hurt :) I got the picture from google . tis cool =] thanksmuchly :heart:

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~Angel-Soul Jul 21, 2005, 6:53:33 AM
awwww thankyou so much :) yeah . don't look forward to having a tattoo on your heart . it's an experience . some might say it's worth having one simply for the good times that came of it better.to.have.loved :aww:

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*blinddragon Jul 21, 2005, 12:37:35 PM
I liiike. Especially the through and through and through part...reminds me of the saying u say something three times or more and a person will remember it more often. The poem is short and simple but I really like it because it deals with something anyone can probably relate to if theyve ever had their heart broken by another. good way to keep it real :3

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-Someone please tell'm they cant do it like i do it-
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